(8分段）Creating a Green CampusCreating a green did good to both theenvironment and people who live in it. Itwill provide a more healthy andcomfortable environment
（8分段） ◼ Creating a Green Campus ◼ Creating a green did good to both the environment and people who live in it. It will provide a more healthy and comfortable environment
What does a green campus mean? It must beenvironmnent-friendly. The campus may lookbeautiful and clean. No garbage is throwneverywhere. No trees are chopped off. No dirtywater is running on the campus. In order to createsuch a green campus, students are supposed topay more attention to their behaviors. Forexample, they should grow a good habit ofprotecting plants in the campus and collecting althe garbage that they have used. Universitiesalso should strength the education of how toprotect the environment and organizes a varietyof activities to prompt the movement. Everyperson, every deed will make our dream realize
• What does a green campus mean? It must be environmnent-friendly. The campus may look beautiful and clean. No garbage is thrown everywhere. No trees are chopped off. No dirty water is running on the campus. In order to create such a green campus, students are supposed to pay more attention to their behaviors. For example, they should grow a good habit of protecting plants in the campus and collecting all the garbage that they have used. Universities also should strength the education of how to protect the environment and organizes a variety of activities to prompt the movement. Every person, every deed will make our dream realize
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eco-friendly
点评，①从文章内容上讲，本文大致是围绕提纲线索展开的，但是，论述部分缺乏分论点观点阐述不够透彻，没有很强的说服力。②从文章的结构上看，文章虽有段落衔接句，但是语义的转折不够流畅和自然，而且文章第三段对于从学生和学校不同角度的论述，没有鲜明的语言用以提示和说明整篇文章的结构不够紧凑，表达方式单一·③从文章的遣词造句上看，文章使用的词汇较为简单，有较多的语法错误，句式也
• 点评 • ①从文章内容上讲，本文大致是围绕提纲 线索展开的，但是，论述部分缺乏分论点， 观点阐述不够透彻，没有很强的说服力。 • ②从文章的结构上看，文章虽有段落衔接 句，但是语义的转折不够流畅和自然，而 且文章第三段对于从学生和学校不同角度 的论述，没有鲜明的语言用以提示和说明， 整篇文章的结构不够紧凑，表达方式单一。 • ③从文章的遣词造句上看，文章使用的词 汇较为简单，有较多的语法错误，句式也 比较单调