o C Translation 3: 此同 级专员已经启动并孜孜以求于改组人权中心,以便秘书处能以 应对联 益增 求和世界就 要致力于实现人 人权。这 规范变为影响人们的 程中,人权专 好正在启 攻布痛下次心,粜推跬和保一切人夜 署必须为高级专员提供必要的支持 Comments Improvements are further made on authenticity and coherence by, using such expressions as与此同时;以 要 and so on and by employing the sentence pattern这个目标, d■ substituting主要致 现人人享有人权nd在实现目标的过程中,人权专 le previous Consequently, the translation sounds more like a piece of Chinese writing
• C) Translation 3: • 与此同时，高级专员已经启动并孜孜以求于改组人权中心，以便秘书处能以 最高工作标准去有效应对联合国官员日益增长的要求和世界范围的日益增长 的挑战。专署是世界上的唯一人权论坛，主要致力于实现人人享有人权。这 个目标，只有通过将原则和规范变为影响人们的生活方式的具体行动，才能 实现。在实现目标的过程中，人权专署就能进一步推动高级专员做好正在启 动的工作。作为最重要的人权论坛，专署必须为高级专员提供必要的支持， 以便他痛下决心，来推进和保护一切人权。 • Comments: • Improvements are further made on authenticity and coherence by using such expressions as 与此同时；以便；主要在于，and so on; and by employing the sentence pattern这个目标，只有……，才能实and by substituting主要致力于实现人人享有人权and在实现目标的过程中，人权专 署就能进一步推动高级专员做好正在启动的工作for the previous. Consequently, the translation sounds more like a piece of Chinese writing
o 3 The diverse ramifications of the end of the cold war remain a palpable factor in the world even today, nearly a decade later. The cessation of super-Power rivals and military confrontation set in train a whole host of progressive changes within and among countries. At the same time, the international community is still struggling with the adverse consequences of bipolarity's collapse The inner-ethnic conflicts that followed the break-up of several multi-ethnic states, whether in central asia or the former Yugoslavia, are tragic cases in point. Some of the former proxy battlegrounds of the cold war in asia and africa continue to reel from instability
• 3 The diverse ramifications of the end of the cold war remain a palpable factor in the world even today, nearly a decade later. The cessation of super-Power rivals and military confrontation set in train a whole host of progressive changes within and among countries. At the same time, the international community is still struggling with the adverse consequences of bipolarity’s collapse. The inner-ethnic conflicts that followed the break-up of several multi-ethnic States, whether in central Asia or the former Yugoslavia, are tragic cases in point. Some of the former proxy battlegrounds of the cold war in Asia and Africa continue to reel from instability
1) Analysis of the original
1) Analysis of the original:
A) Grammatical analysis, U 1 Sentence structure The selection consists of five sentences and all of the sentences are simple in structure except for the fourth, which is a complex sentence, composed of a main clause and an attributive clause. 2. Additional complication In the first sentence, nearly a decade later is in apposition to today before it, serving grammatically as the appositive and functionally to explain when today is, In the le second sentence, the hrase set in train means cause.. to happen The third sentence begins with a prepositional phrase while the fourth sentence has a parenthetic structure embedded, that is, whether in central asia or the former Yugoslavia
A) Grammatical analysis: • 1. Sentence structure： • The selection consists of five sentences, and all of the sentences are simple in structure except for the fourth, which is a complex sentence, composed of a main clause and an attributive clause. • 2. Additional complication • In the first sentence, nearly a decade later is in apposition to today before it, serving grammatically as the appositive and functionally to explain when today is. In the second sentence, the phrase set in train means cause… to happen. The third sentence begins with a prepositional phrase while the fourth sentence has a parenthetic structure embedded, that is, whether in central Asia or the former Yugoslavia
B)Stylistic analysis Periodicity The selection consists of five sentences of which the first two and the very last are loose sentences while the two in the middle are periodic, for the beginning with a prepositional phrase and the insertion of a parenthetic structure respectively. However, at the end of the first sentence there is a noun phrase serving as appositive to what goes before and adding complexity to the sentence structure
B) Stylistic analysis: • 1. Periodicity： • The selection consists of five sentences, of which the first two and the very last are loose sentences while the two in the middle are periodic, for the beginning with a prepositional phrase and the insertion of a parenthetic structure respectively. However, at the end of the first sentence, there is a noun phrase serving as appositive to what goes before and adding complexity to the sentence structure