Examples: "Any parent will tell you that goldfish are a great first pet for a child.They hardly need any attention,and they won't be around for too long.Flushing a goldfish in its first week is pretty common-it even happened to my first goldfish.But it tums out that goldfish aren't as helpless as weall think. "While most coffee enthusiasts would tell you that their favorite drink comes from a bean,they would be wrong.Coffee is actually made from a seed that is simply called a bean." 9.Statistics By listing proven facts at the very beginning of your paper,you will create interest that can be carried throughout the rest of the essay. Examples: "The average iceberg weighs over 100,000 metric tons." 70%of all jobs found today were got through different networking strategies" 6
6 Examples: “Any parent will tell you that goldfish are a great first pet for a child. They hardly need any attention, and they won’t be around for too long. Flushing a goldfish in its first week is pretty common—it even happened to my first goldfish. But it turns out that goldfish aren’t as helpless as we all think.” “While most coffee enthusiasts would tell you that their favorite drink comes from a bean, they would be wrong. Coffee is actually made from a seed that is simply called a bean.” 9.Statistics By listing proven facts at the very beginning of your paper, you will create interest that can be carried throughout the rest of the essay. Examples: “The average iceberg weighs over 100,000 metric tons.” “70% of all jobs found today were got through different networking strategies
Academic Writing How to Write a strong Thesis Statement Ask yourself the following questions when writing a thesis statement: >Location&Format Is it at the end of the introductory paragraph? Is it a complete,grammatically correct sentence? O Does it show what type of essay (analytical,expository.argumentative, narrative,etc)it is? >Content 0 O Does it only discuss ideas that will be analyzed in your paper? O Does it clearly show your stance/position on the topic? Does it give a"guide"of how you will analyze/evaluate the topic? NOTE:If you answered"No"to any of the questions above you must revise your thesis statement.Your readers should know all of this information just by reading the thesis statement. PRACTICE 1:Are the thesis statements below strong?Why or why not? 1.There are two abilities:bodily-kinesthetic and interpersonal intelligence. 2.I choose to learn the major of Art and design,because I think I am good at capturing the Intrapersonal Intelligence and Existential Intelligence 3.While ther are many istic and naturalist intelligences are my two strongest intelligence 4.People like leaders and business men are those who have developed more linguistic and interpersonal intelligence. 5.People who want to be a professor at the university might do better if they have strength in linguistic and interpersonal intelligence PRACTICE2:Read the thesis statements below.Write your working thesis statement below. 1.The solutions to this problem (identity fraud)lie in the combination of individuals, and the govemment colla gether heolutions to this prblem (idmtiry frad)lis in the sombintion of individuals organizations and the government working together by increasing self-awareness of protection,updating the cyber security system of websites and reforming the financial security system
7 Academic Writing How to Write a strong Thesis Statement Ask yourself the following questions when writing a thesis statement: ➢ Location & Format Is it at the end of the introductory paragraph? Is it a complete, grammatically correct sentence? Does it show what type of essay (analytical, expository, argumentative, narrative,etc) it is ? ➢ Content Does it include the main idea(topic)AND the controlling ideas Is the scope specific enough (not too vague or large)? Does it only discuss ideas that will be analyzed in your paper? Does it clearly show your stance/ position on the topic? Does it give a "guide" of how you will analyze/evaluate the topic? NOTE: If you answered "No" to any of the questions above you must revise your thesis statement. Your readers should know all of this information just by reading the thesis statement. PRACTICE 1:Are the thesis statements below strong? Why or why not? 1. There are two abilities: bodily-kinesthetic and interpersonal intelligence. 2. I choose to learn the major of Art and design, because I think I am good at capturing the Intrapersonal Intelligence and Existential Intelligence 3. While there are many different intelligences, linguistic and naturalist intelligences are my two strongest intelligence. 4. People like leaders and business men are those who have developed more linguistic and interpersonal intelligence. 5. People who want to be a professor at the university might do better if they have strength in linguistic and interpersonal intelligence. PRACTICE 2: Read the thesis statements below. Write your working thesis statement below. 1. The solutions to this problem (identity fraud) lie in the combination of individuals, organizations, and the government collaborating together. 2. The solutions to this problem (identity fraud) lie in the combination of individuals, organizations and the government working together by increasing self-awareness of protection, updating the cyber security system of websites and reforming the financial security system
Academic Writing Phrases for Problems/Solutions TASK1:Goto p 227 in your textbook,review the phrases,and fill in the blanks below with the appropriate terms.Pay attention to the phrases/expressions for each category. Phrases to Introduce Problems ●For doctors,. the extra time they spend arguing with ill-informed patients ● the patients increased stress wasted time and patient stress misinformation on the internet Phrases to Introduce Solutions: ● medical websites,doctors and patients _cyberchondria. cyberchondria reorganizing information on medical websites. ·Educating patients cyberchondria Phrases to Make Recommendations for Possible Solutions: .A definite decision by the government o Based on the results.it to make changes to the treatment o An individual's caloric needs before starting any diet. TASK 2:Write down the phrases you would like to use to introduce problems and solutions in your essay. Introduce Problems Introduce Solutions 8
8 Academic Writing Phrases for Problems/ Solutions TASK1: Go to p 227 in your textbook, review the phrases, and fill in the blanks below with the appropriate terms. Pay attention to the phrases/expressions for each category. Phrases to Introduce Problems ⚫ For doctors, _ the extra time they spend arguing with ill-informed patients ⚫ _ the patients increased stress. ⚫ _ wasted time and patient stress _misinformation on the internet Phrases to Introduce Solutions: ⚫ _ medical websites, doctors and patients. ⚫ _ cyberchondria. ⚫ _ cyberchondria _ reorganizing information on medical websites. ⚫ Educating patients _ cyberchondria Phrases to Make Recommendations for Possible Solutions: ⚫ A definite decision by the government _ ⚫ Based on the results, it _ to make changes to the treatment. ⚫ An individual’s caloric needs _ before starting any diet. TASK 2: Write down the phrases you would like to use to introduce problems and solutions in your essay. Introduce Problems Introduce Solutions
Academic Writing Solutions&Limitations TASK 1:According to your textbook.writers can evaluate their solutions by mentioning any limitations (p.231) What strategies can you use to write about the limitations? 品温 Edited Paper 1.Write down solut Problem Solution 1 Solution 2 Solution 3 Details Details Details Limitations: Limitations: Limitations: Refutation: Refutation: Refutation
9 Academic Writing Solutions& Limitations TASK 1: According to your textbook, writers can evaluate their solutions by mentioning any limitations (p. 231) What strategies can you use to write about the limitations? 1._ 2. _ 3. _ 4. _ TASK 2: You have already come up with possible solutions to the problem for your Edited Paper 1. Write down solutions along with some details(steps, examples, etc )and write about any limitations to each solution. Problem Solution 1 Solution 2 Solution 3 Details: Limitations: Refutation: Details: Limitations: Refutation: Details: Limitations: Refutation
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10 Rubric -Edited Paper Essay Organization(45 points) Rough Draft Final Draft Much revision needed Some revision needed Excellent Insufficient evidence of revision Revision is evident, but errors persist Excellent 1. Your work addresses the focus of this assignment:An analytical essay about the topic you have selected, addressing solutions to a problem. 0 1 2 3 4 5 0 1 2 3 4 5 2. Introduction: The introduction engages the reader in the problem: it is 3-4 sentences long (not including the thesis statement. 0 1 2 3 4 5 0 1 2 3 4 5 3. Thesis statement: The thesis statement is the last sentence of the introduction; it clearly states the topic & 3 controlling ideas of the essay. 0 1 2 3 4 5 0 1 2 3 4 5 4. Background Paragraph: The background paragraph is the 2nd paragraph of the essay; it describes background information about the problem and includes any necessary definitions of terminology. The significance of the issue should be emphasized. 0 1 2 3 4 5 0 1 2 3 4 5 5. Body Paragraph: There are 3 body paragraph. Each body paragraph focuses on one of the controlling ideas mentioned in the thesis statement. The main idea(s)of each body paragraph is/are stated in the topic sentence. There is a clear focus throughout the paragraph. 0 2 4 6 8 10 0 2 4 6 8 10 6. Supporting Details: Each body paragraph is developed with details from credible sources; these details should be clearly paraphrased and explained to the reader: each detail has a clear connection to the main idea. 0 2 4 6 8 10 0 2 4 6 8 10 7. Conclusion: The final paragraph does not contain any new ideas, it is 3-5 sentences in length, it gives a very brief summary of the controlling ideas of the essay, and it uses an effective concluding technique. 0 1 2 3 4 5 0 1 2 3 4 5