第五模块|题型探究 写作要求】 应包含所给出的全部信息,开头和结尾已经给出,但 不计入总句数; 2.必须使用5个句子组成连贯的短文。 Dear Peter, I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program Welcome to our school if you have any chance Yours, Li Hua MYKONGLONG
第五模块 │ 题型探究 【写作要求】 1．应包含所给出的全部信息， 开头和结尾已经给出，但 不计入总句数； 2．必须使用5个句子组成连贯的短文。 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program._________________________________________ _______________________________ _________________________________________________ _______________________. Welcome to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua
第五模块|题型探究 【学生样本】 Dear Peter, I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program. DIn order to make our school beautiful and clean the air, we plan to have more trees in our school now.@In order to get good places to study and live, we have many plans. 3First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use. Second we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study. 5 At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers Welcome to our school if you have any chance Yours, Li Hua MYKONGLONG
第五模块 │ 题型探究 【学生样本】 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.①In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air, we plan to have more trees in our school now.②In order to get good places to study and live, we have many plans.③First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.④Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.⑤ At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers. Welcome to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua
第五模块|题型探究 【评论点拨】我们来看看学生的样本有什么地方可以 改进 第①句:“ In order to make our schoo| beautiful and clean the air”比较生硬, to make our school beautifu应该改为 ito make our school more beautiful; “ we plan to have more trees in our school now”中的 have改为plan会好些。 第②句:没有涉及表格内的内容,是个废句,而且还 霸占了后面的信息的位置 第③句:“ First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use:”中的画线部分 没有表达出“供同学们参观、实践”的意思。 MYKONGLONG
第五模块 │ 题型探究 【评论点拨】 我们来看看学生的样本有什么地方可以 改进： 第①句：“In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air ”比较生硬， to make our school beautiful应该改为to make our school more beautiful； “we plan to have more trees in our school now”中的 have改为plant会好些。 第②句：没有涉及表格内的内容， 是个废句， 而且还 霸占了后面的信息的位置。 第③句：“First, we plan to build a botanical garden_and_let_students_visit_and_use.”中的画线部分 没有表达出“供同学们参观、实践”的意思