题目：清晰 。避免过于宏观和模糊的概念 Effect of human behavior on energy consumption o改：Effect of energy-use behavior of occupants on energy consumption in commercial buildings
避免过于宏观和模糊的概念 ◦ Effect of human behavior on energy consumption ◦ 改：Effect of energy-use behavior of occupants on energy consumption in commercial buildings
题目：清晰 。避免连接词造成的歧义和混淆 Tracking long-distance migration of gray whales with geolocators 改：Tracking long-distance migration of gray whales by using geolocators
避免连接词造成的歧义和混淆 ◦ Tracking long-distance migration of gray whales with geolocators ◦ 改：Tracking long-distance migration of gray whales by using geolocators